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minus-squareZozano@aussie.zonecakelinkfedilinkEnglisharrow-up0·edit-22 months agoIMO, the second sentence feels like it’s cut off because I’m expecting an adjective at least, like: He gazed toward the elementary school with a glint in his eye. Or, He gazed towards the elementary school and muttered ‘I wouldn’t hurt them’, as his nose began to grow. Though the one-sentence format is preferable for me.
IMO, the second sentence feels like it’s cut off because I’m expecting an adjective at least, like:
He gazed toward the elementary school with a glint in his eye.
Or,
He gazed towards the elementary school and muttered ‘I wouldn’t hurt them’, as his nose began to grow.
Though the one-sentence format is preferable for me.